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Reviews of Nagisa's Temptation

Postby Review Type S-2 » Tue Apr 24, '12, 3:20 am

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Re: Reviews of Nagisa's Temptation

Postby Lucas » Sat Apr 28, '12, 8:56 am

Nagisa is an interesting character, she’s the chick with the eye patch from memory. It was very nice to read about her with some character fleshed out as I’ve never payed Infinity obviously due to it not getting an English release.

Your story has got a rather dark and emotional theme to it which I quite like, I felt you expressed this well with Emilia.

It was nice to read a story set in the Phantasy Star Universe, universe. Nice job. ;)
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Re: Reviews of Nagisa's Temptation

Postby tilinelson2 » Tue May 1, '12, 4:02 am

Thanks, Lucas, I'm glad you liked it. Not many people are into PSU and PSP universe, and even less people are aware of Infinity's story. It is a pity because I quite liked Nagisa's story (the girl with the eye-patch). It borrows a bit from other games story during its development, but in essence she is quite original and intriguing.

I tried to keep truthful to the game while developing the characters out of their usual superficial interactions, especially giving some life to the hunter who is impersonating the PC (that's why he is nameless). I thought it had to be very difficult for Nagisa to carry out her initial plan and sacrifice herself to kill the Dark Force living inside her after having the opportunity of learning that life could be good, through the friendships developed. Also, it should be very difficult for the hunter to kill her, knowing she was innocent. And also hard on poor Emilia to watch her friend die, powerless to stop. So, I just tried to add the proper feelings to this touching scene, keeping most of the original dialogue.
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