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Reviews of Seed's Project

Postby Review Type S-2 » Fri Mar 4, '11, 3:25 pm

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This topic is for reviews of Seed's Project by carlsojos. You may use this topic to let carlsojos know what you think of this work. When commenting, try to go into detail about what you enjoyed or thought could be improved. Both praise and constructive criticism are encouraged. Please refrain from making non-constructive criticisms.

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Re: Reviews of Seed's Project

Postby tilinelson2 » Sun Mar 20, '11, 11:53 pm

Nice view of Rika's upbringing. It must not have been an easy task to educate her in just one year, specially considering Seed wanted all the best for her in terms of morals and values. It is a short and lovely story.
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Re: Reviews of Seed's Project

Postby carlsojos » Mon Mar 21, '11, 11:42 pm

This is one of those stories where I looked at the calendar, went, "Oh, shoot!" and typed it up in a single day since I had promised to release my first fanfic by New Year's Day. It was pretty interesting what happened when I brought the completed story to my friend's party that night... something about a couple ladies and a game involving the word "Seed"....
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Re: Reviews of A Paper Log

Postby tilinelson2 » Sun Mar 27, '11, 7:49 am

Interesting story. Of course its technical aspect will not make it enjoyable to all readers like it is for this crazy computer engineer here. You make a consistent explanation for the abhoring events of Rika creation, based on Nei, and explains in a creative way why it took so long for Seed to create Rika. It is consistent with the PS timeline (the true explanation, though, is that Naka, Kodama and the others couldn't get over Nei's death and acted like 8-years-old, coming with an absurd explanation to throw a Nei's facsimile in PSIV and give her a silly Final Fantasyesque happy ending - rant over :p). Anyway, great job, though not for general audiences.
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Re: Reviews of A Paper Log

Postby carlsojos » Sun Mar 27, '11, 1:57 pm

I personally prefer the smell of old socks over this story, but that's just me. I think it needs a lot more polish, and a lesson in respecting prose.

Well, the reader is king, so I rest my case.
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Re: Reviews of Black Clothes

Postby tilinelson2 » Wed Mar 30, '11, 1:38 pm

Interesting follow-up to your previous Rika and Seed fanfic. I like the way you are explaining Seed's internal conflict that lead to its demise. Rika's immaturity is well-portrayed as well.
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Re: Reviews of A Paper Log

Postby Silver_Surfer1 » Mon Apr 4, '11, 3:49 am

Interesting story, especially with the Rika aspect involved. I'm not very into technical stories and stuff though, although I know many love to read that kind of thing, but still it was an enjoyable and learning read. Thanks for sharing the story. :)
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Re: Reviews of Seed's Project

Postby H-Man » Tue Apr 19, '11, 11:34 am

Although your main talents lie in writing the more technical details in stories, I was really impressed at how sweet the story is. It's a pretty down-to-Earth depiction of a typical father-daughter (and friend) relationship, except that the parties involved are not your typical people (a computer, a numan, and an android).
*H-Man as Chaz, looks at Rika, aka Paula* Chaz-Man- "Hey, I've been wandering around Motavia for quite a while with you now. It says in that weird blue box up there that one more battle with a sandworm and we can level up to husband and wife!"

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Re: Reviews of Seed's Project

Postby Silver_Surfer1 » Wed Apr 20, '11, 12:53 pm

Very enjoyable story to read. Short, but it also has a lot of powerful content, relationship wise, etc. The ending was very touching, almost bittersweet to some extent. A very fun part was "story about a blue hedgehog who can run faster than anything in the world".
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Re: Reviews of Black Clothes

Postby Silver_Surfer1 » Wed Apr 20, '11, 1:11 pm

Good follow-up to the original story. The outfit selection was fun to read and quite normal in a parent/child sense. Seems like Rika is going to have to grow up sooner than perhaps she wants to. Looking forward to more of the story. :)
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