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Reviews of Closure

Postby Review Type S-2 » Thu Apr 7, '11, 9:14 pm

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You may use this topic to share your thoughts regarding Closure by H-Man. When reviewing, try to go into detail about what you enjoy or feel could be improved in Closure. Both praise and constructive criticism intended to help H-Man in future endeavors are encouraged. Please refrain from making non-constructive comments.

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Re: Reviews of Closure

Postby tilinelson2 » Fri Apr 8, '11, 2:21 am

I like very much the message of the story. If you pay attention, this is a recurring message in my fanfics: "forget about what is part of the past, you can't change it. Bury the Hatchet and do your best from now on".

Quite nicely written. Very beautiful, indeed. I´d just advise you to proofread it again, as I noticed some small mistakes here and there.
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Re: Reviews of Closure

Postby Silver_Surfer1 » Fri Apr 8, '11, 8:21 am

A good read and an interesting story. I agree with tilinelson2's thoughts on the message of the story regarding not being able to change the past and not dwelling on it, etc., and would also say that it's a good reminder for us to try and watch the things we say and how we say them in the present times as words are a powerful tool and can have an awesome affect (sometimes good, sometimes bad) on people, especially those close to us.

I also noticed a few little areas that could use more proofreading in the story.

Very entertaining reading, and a good message too.
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Re: Reviews of Closure

Postby H-Man » Fri Apr 8, '11, 12:11 pm

Okay, edited and re-posted. Thanks for the reviews!
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Re: Reviews of Closure

Postby augmentedfourth » Fri Apr 8, '11, 1:51 pm

Aw, this one was sad. It was good to see a glimpse of Sari's life growing up and her relationship with Lena, as these things are glossed over in the game. I can see her as an obnoxious, bratty teenager. :D I agree with the others in that there was a good message here, and a reminder to "never go to bed angry", as some people say.
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Re: Reviews of Closure

Postby carlsojos » Fri Apr 8, '11, 3:23 pm

I spotted one minor error in my read-through.
"her undergarments will quite short" I'd replace "will" with "were"

Beyond that, interesting story, and has a moral to it. Good read.
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Re: Reviews of Closure

Postby Silver_Surfer1 » Tue Aug 7, '18, 7:58 pm

Reading this beautiful story by H-Man again. A bit sad but a profound message to be found. Excellent. :clap:
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Re: Reviews of Closure

Postby Silver_Surfer1 » Sun Apr 7, '19, 9:49 pm

Worth reading once again. A good story with a good message.
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