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Reviews of Takeoff (loosely based on Orbiter 2010)

Postby Review Type S-2 » Thu Mar 17, '11, 5:30 am

Hello,

This topic is for reviews of Takeoff (loosely based on Orbiter 2010) by carlsojos. You may use this topic to let carlsojos know what you think of this work. When commenting, try to go into detail about what you enjoyed or thought could be improved. Both praise and constructive criticism are encouraged. Please refrain from making non-constructive criticisms.

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Re: Reviews of Takeoff (loosely based on Orbiter 2010)

Postby tilinelson2 » Fri Mar 18, '11, 8:32 pm

Interesting story. Much like Test Flight without the madness. The story is a bit focused on the technical aspects of the flight, but the last lines offer something beautiful: after all the technical aspects, the copilot has the chance to admire our beautiful planet from the outerspace for the first time. I guess it was an unique experience.
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Re: Reviews of Takeoff (loosely based on Orbiter 2010)

Postby carlsojos » Fri Mar 18, '11, 8:36 pm

Yeah. I still remember the first time I put a Deltaglider into orbit. Earth really is beautiful, even on a computer screen.
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Re: Reviews of Takeoff (loosely based on Orbiter 2010)

Postby Tanith » Fri May 6, '11, 2:52 am

Very vivid! You know, when I first read "Hydrofoil," I was sure I wouldn't like the narration at all, but guess what? You're really good at writing from this viewpoint. The dialogue is placed at just the right intervals, to give it a story feel and not an activity log. Well, that, plus your writing here is not dry in the least. Also, your dialogue is really enjoyable. The co-pilot is a colorful character, which adds some flavor to the story. I especially liked the ending; I was imagining the beauty of being in space along with "you."
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