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PostPosted: Tue Jan 18, '11, 11:42 am 
Hello,

This topic is for reviews of Accepting Fate: Artificial Heartbeat by Lucas. You may use this topic to let Lucas know what you think of this work. When commenting, try to go into detail about what you enjoyed or thought could be improved. Both praise and constructive criticism are encouraged. Please refrain from making non-constructive criticisms.

Please keep your comments in this thread on the subject of Accepting Fate: Artificial Heartbeat. If you would like to discuss another writing, please do so in that writing's review thread.

Thanks,
Thoul


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PostPosted: Thu Feb 10, '11, 8:50 pm 
I just finished reading both chapters of the story and look forward to reading more ahead. Digital Girl (DG) sounds like a very interesting character. Also that is an excellent drawing that you did. DG looks terrific! I really enjoyed reading the background part of the story that you gave as it really helped in setting up the story, imho. It will be interesting to see what happens ahead here with this story.

Great writing and start to the story, Lucas! :clap:


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PostPosted: Sat Feb 12, '11, 12:07 am 
Thanks SS I appreciate it, I plan to upload the second chapter within the upcoming week. :)

Also I did a huge overhaul on her biography page, looks a lot better in my opinion. :wink:


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PostPosted: Tue Mar 1, '11, 2:25 am 
Just read the new chapter, and really, really enjoyed that one. Lots of different and terrific looks there but I liked the insect best of all. :wink:

This was a very fun chapter to read. Excellent story!!! :)

And now, I must go check out the rehaul on the biography page which I forgot to do before.


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PostPosted: Fri Jul 29, '11, 3:23 pm 
Time for an encouragement message (I usually opt to review only when finished):

Until now, we have only unanswered questions. DG is an intriguing character because, though being only AI with a synthetic body, she acts like a person sometimes.

Your writing is more accessible than in the original Accepting Fate. For me, it makes no significant difference, but I'm sure some people will prefer this way. Just take care with the typos.

Can't wait for the rest.


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PostPosted: Sun May 27, '12, 11:37 pm 
Well, since it's been so long since I read the above, I decided the best thing to do and reaquaint myself with this story and DG once again was to begin re-reading the story all over again. Currently, I've just finished the third chapter and will continue to read it a few chapters at a time until I finish it. DG's need for companionship and desire to learn new things by wanting to continue her new relationship/friendship with Elisa and to want to get out and about and experience new things strikes a chord in all of us at sometime or other, I think. Looking forward to reading more of this as I have the time.


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PostPosted: Mon May 28, '12, 12:12 am 
Decided to read one more chapter, and am glad I did, lol. It was terrific and made me laugh at the designs DG was trying out. LOL on the identity theft and the locusta! Okay, will read more later.


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PostPosted: Tue May 29, '12, 4:09 am 
Finished Chapters 4 and 5 this evening. Enjoyed them both. I did see one or two typos in chapter 5 (one where the word "should" might ought to be "shoulder").

What strikes me most about the story so far is DG's enthusiasm for trying new things and what she hopes she will discover during her journey. Interesting about the cactus find and her silver "blood". Also, I'll bet those goons are sorry they ever messed with DG!


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PostPosted: Tue May 29, '12, 5:35 am 
Yes SS, I wouldn’t be surprised if you encounter quite a few typos in my earlier chapters from last year (I’ll go through and try fix them up soon). But I’m glad you’re enjoying it. Her power level is definitely something to be in awe of, but what is even scarier about her is her level of intelligence.


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PostPosted: Tue Jul 3, '12, 10:36 pm 
Okay, read it all and I quite liked the way you handled DG quest for being more Girl than Digital. Her quest is very common on sci-fi fantasy, but I quite liked the way you used a Mieu-type android as a way of making DG become aware of what she really was, and then find a purpose to her existence.

Thanks for writing such a nice piece.


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