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Reviews of Matt's Journal

Postby Review Type S-2 » Thu Aug 5, '10, 10:50 am

Hello,

This topic is for reviews of Matt's Journal by Atlinsmere. You may use this topic to let Atlinsmere know what you think of this work. When commenting, try to go into detail about what you enjoyed or thought could be improved. Both praise and constructive criticism are encouraged. Please refrain from making non-constructive criticisms.

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Re: Reviews of Matt's Journal

Postby Aeroprism » Thu Aug 5, '10, 2:16 pm

It's like being a teenager again, except it's not me, and it's not how I lived it.

Hard to come up with lots to say, it's very short and concise. I'd have absolutely no hesitation in reading further should you decide to pursue the venture.

All you need now is a plan. What are your goals with the story? How big do you picture it? Many characters? How far into fiction are you going to go?

Etc etc etc...

Keep it up.
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Re: Reviews of Matt's Journal

Postby H-Man » Thu Aug 5, '10, 2:47 pm

The beginning of the story is vaguely reminiscent of my years in middle school: "If I just died, would anyone outside my family really care?" Of course in retrospect, I can see how many people have been affected (positively) by my being alive, so the answer is a resounding yes.

Curious as to where exactly this is going to go.
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Re: Reviews of Matt's Journal

Postby Thoul » Thu Aug 5, '10, 6:21 pm

This is an interesting beginning. I look forward to seeing how the story will continue. I think Matt will be better off living away from his Aunt and Uncle, from the brief descriptions of them.
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Re: Reviews of Matt's Journal

Postby Atlinsmere » Thu Aug 5, '10, 8:38 pm

Aeroprism wrote:All you need now is a plan. What are your goals with the story? How big do you picture it? Many characters? How far into fiction are you going to go?


To be honest, at this point it's just touch and go for me. I'm making it all up as I go. I know I plan to have him in high school eventually where he'll meet some people. Assuming that starts at the beginning of the next month, I still have two weeks to play with until that time.

I picture this as being a personal journal of a character I made up. That being Matt. I had to actually change a few things because I made it seem like he was telling the story to someone instead of himself. So I guess this story is helping with my writing. Characters will be introduced ever so slowly, and some might be described vaguely while others over exaggerated. I suppose you can expect random skits too that seem improbable. If I feel up to it, I may eventually start making pictures and adding them in.

Not sure of how many characters will be introduced at the moment. So far we have three, that being Linda, Charlie, and naturally, Matt. As for how far I'll go? I don't know. Could be a month, a year, four years, etc. Only time will tell down the line.

With that said I thank you all for your compliments and interest in Matt's Journal. I'll be sure to add another entry in the future. Also, I suppose now would be a good time to mention that an Entry could be really long, or in other cases, as short as a paragraph. This is to make it more believable that it's like a journal.
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Re: Reviews of Matt's Journal

Postby Silver_Surfer1 » Thu Aug 12, '10, 8:27 am

Well, you have certainly captured my interest in this story, Atlin. Short or long, I will read it any way. :yes:

Matt seems like an interesting guy that would be even more interesting the better you get to know him, if it is entirely possible to do so that is. I think he'll do better on his own and be more happier having his own space. I like the way you are telling this story as a journal from Matt's own perspective. Looking forward to reading more. :)
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Re: Reviews of Matt's Journal

Postby Atlinsmere » Thu Aug 12, '10, 8:33 am

Thanks SS, glad to know you're enjoying it. I'll try and get entry two up by the end of next week, quite possibly sooner than that. Since this is, afterall, a touch and go story, I'll see what I can do. ^_^
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Re: Reviews of Matt's Journal

Postby Silver_Surfer1 » Tue Aug 17, '10, 3:44 am

Another interesting entry in Matt's Journal. We get to know a few more interesting facts about him here. So realistic when they visit the bath house and wind up in the opposite place of where they wanted to be :lol:. Great job, Atlin! Looking forward to reading more. :)
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Re: Reviews of Matt's Journal

Postby Thoul » Tue Aug 17, '10, 5:17 pm

Yes, a great second entry. It's good to see Matt reconnecting with an old friend.
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Re: Reviews of Matt's Journal

Postby Atlinsmere » Wed Aug 18, '10, 12:05 am

Thanks for the comments. I'll try and get another entry up by Sunday, though there will be no guarantees. At this point I'm deciding in what direction I should take the story.

I am up to suggestions.
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