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Reviews of The Lost Esper

Postby Review Type S-2 » Wed Jan 14, '09, 7:01 pm

Hello,

This topic is for reviews of The Lost Esper, the fan fiction by Darkil. You may use this topic to let Darkil know what you think of this story. When commenting on the story, try to go into detail about what you enjoyed or thought could be improved. Both praise and constructive criticism are encouraged. Please refrain from making non-constructive criticisms.

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Postby Thoul » Fri Jan 16, '09, 5:54 pm

Great start, Darkil. I look forward to seeing more and finding out how all the plot threads tie together.
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Postby Snorb » Sat Jan 17, '09, 6:44 am

Same here, Darkil! Looking forward to see who Alaires knows, and just how the PSIV crew is handling themselves after the Profound Darkness!

(And wondering myself if you'll say who Chaz's fifth party member was =p)
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Postby Darkil » Sun Jan 25, '09, 4:04 am

Sorry for the long wait all, I finally got some free time to cook up Chapter 2. Funny thing is, I have a bunch of information for later chapters and didn't have much for this one. Anyway it leads up nicely to what I have in mind next, hope you enjoy.
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Postby Lucas » Sun Jan 25, '09, 12:00 pm

I like what you've done so far Dakril. Hehehe the Esper has my name :lol: . Can't wait to see more in the future. :clap:
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Postby Srijita » Sun Feb 1, '09, 2:38 pm

[face=Times New Roman]Oh, you updated, Darkil! What a treat. And things seem to be hotting up...

Lucas wrote:Hehehe the Esper has my name :lol:


Yes, I noticed that too. :wink:
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Postby Thoul » Sun Feb 1, '09, 6:45 pm

Great chapter! So Alaires knows Chaz huh? That's an interesting development.
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Postby Darkil » Mon Feb 2, '09, 9:14 pm

Well I certainly won't spoil anything now but I wanted to give a little fan service to everyone. Plus it'll give you a chance to appreciate what she goes through given her "associations". Sorry for the lack of updates thus far, just found out my home computers hard drive decided to up and quit one day. I have a replacement but am unsure at the moment if it works. Once I get it in I'll do some more writing, I generally don't have much time to do so at work and even if I tried it would end up a rush mess.
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Postby Darkil » Thu Feb 12, '09, 8:14 pm

Ok so Chapter 4 is posted, hopefully the time I took to create it will pay off.
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Postby Thoul » Thu Feb 12, '09, 8:39 pm

I think you posted that in the wrong thread, Darkil. Did you mean for it to go into the story thread?
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