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Reviews of Creation and Destruction (A really short story)

Postby Review Type S-2 » Sat May 1, '10, 10:08 am

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This topic is for reviews of Creation and Destruction (A really short story) by Atlinsmere. You may use this topic to let Atlinsmere know what you think of this work. When commenting, try to go into detail about what you enjoyed or thought could be improved. Both praise and constructive criticism are encouraged. Please refrain from making non-constructive criticisms.

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Re: Reviews of Creation and Destruction (A really short stor

Postby Tanith » Sat May 1, '10, 1:41 pm

Very interesting read, Atlin. It was like Algo's own Genesis story. Well done! :up:

It's too bad you say you're done with it; I actually think you could expand on it and make it sort of a "Silmarillion" for Phantasy Star.
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Re: Reviews of Creation and Destruction (A really short stor

Postby Thoul » Sat May 1, '10, 3:30 pm

That is really short. It's an interesting take on where the Great Light might have gone after the ancient battle.
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Re: Reviews of Creation and Destruction (A really short stor

Postby Silver_Surfer1 » Sun Jul 11, '10, 3:25 am

An intriguing and interesting story. Very nicely written also. I agree, It would be interesting to see this one continued at some time in the future.
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Re: Reviews of Creation and Destruction (A really short stor

Postby tilinelson2 » Sun Mar 20, '11, 11:31 pm

Short, but intriguing to see that Great Light was weakened by fighting against Profound Darkness, to the point of becoming a no-match for its nemesis. Would like to read more about it, to understand better how this process happened and what both entities planned to get out of this stalemate.
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Re: Reviews of Creation and Destruction (A really short stor

Postby Silver_Surfer1 » Mon May 2, '16, 3:42 pm

Took a few minutes to read this one again. It is short, which I like to see in some stories as it seems easier to read through it all. Great subject here also. Well done, Atlinsmere!
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Re: Reviews of Creation and Destruction (A really short stor

Postby Silver_Surfer1 » Fri Sep 1, '17, 2:33 am

Took a few minutes to read this short story again. Good work!
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Re: Reviews of Creation and Destruction (A really short stor

Postby myau56 » Fri Sep 1, '17, 1:18 pm

I can confirm : very interesting story ! But so short ! :( But great work indeed so congratulations ! :clap:
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Re: Reviews of Creation and Destruction (A really short stor

Postby Atlinsmere » Tue Oct 10, '17, 4:44 am

Thanks for the reviews everyone. It's nice to see something I wrote on a whim seven years ago is still getting attention to this day. I've actually reread a few times myself since then and am astounded that I was able to write this. I guess my writing skills are a little rusty, but I feel like if I were to extend this story, it would ruin it. So I'm happy with the length of the story and am pleased with how it turned out.

Thanks again guys, you're great! :D
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Re: Reviews of Creation and Destruction (A really short stor

Postby myau56 » Tue Oct 10, '17, 11:53 am

We are all great here ! :rofl: :)
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