Ok, Xan. I've got some more constructive criticism for you.
Rune's face, as a bishounen, is too broad. Normally, these type of male characters in manga have very slender, delicate, almost feminine features. Not that I should have you drawing Rune looking like a girl, and his ponytail need a lot of work as well.
You might want to use fewer pencil strokes next time. Also, his body tapers too much towards the bottom, if you look at the comparison between his shoulders (which are quite broad) and waist, and that's far too narrow for a male character. I'll layoff for the hands for now, because every artist knows that's their worst enemy. ^^ Absolute pain to draw...
So, that's it for now.
