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Reviews of Memories of Love

Postby Review Type S-2 » Fri May 13, '11, 2:28 am

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Re: Reviews of Memories of Love

Postby H-Man » Fri May 13, '11, 11:31 am

Okay. You seem to be breaking down, Tili, in writing a story of this nature. Soon you'll be writing about Cloud and Tifa and giving us a detailed wedding fic of Maia and Rhys.

Jokes aside, you had some beautiful prose in this story. I specifically liked the last paragraph of the second chapter and some of the descriptive language at the beginning of the third chapter. The dialogue is more organic than usual. Interesting philosophical approach to the relationship between Rune and Alys (i.e. they discuss relationships in a somewhat philosophical way as their own develops). I also enjoyed the end of the last chapter--not her death, of course, but how he could look into her eyes in her final moments and receive that last assurance of her feelings for him.
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