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PostPosted: Fri May 13, '11, 2:28 am 
Hello,

You may use this topic to share your thoughts regarding Memories of Love by tilinelson2. When reviewing, try to go into detail about what you enjoy or feel could be improved in Memories of Love. Both praise and constructive criticism intended to help tilinelson2 in future endeavors are encouraged. Please refrain from making non-constructive comments.

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PostPosted: Fri May 13, '11, 11:31 am 
Okay. You seem to be breaking down, Tili, in writing a story of this nature. Soon you'll be writing about Cloud and Tifa and giving us a detailed wedding fic of Maia and Rhys.

Jokes aside, you had some beautiful prose in this story. I specifically liked the last paragraph of the second chapter and some of the descriptive language at the beginning of the third chapter. The dialogue is more organic than usual. Interesting philosophical approach to the relationship between Rune and Alys (i.e. they discuss relationships in a somewhat philosophical way as their own develops). I also enjoyed the end of the last chapter--not her death, of course, but how he could look into her eyes in her final moments and receive that last assurance of her feelings for him.


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