Thanks for reading and reviewing my story.
But... how can you say I should chop down bits of my awesome psychological flows?
It is the same as asking Virginia Woolf to chop hers. She would end with only 10 pages/book, though.
The repetition is there on purpose. I know, it is a matter of style. For me, the action is superfluous, the psychological drama is the important part. That is why I spend more time describing Maia's thoughts than her travels and action.
About the captain scene, the purposes were different. The Anna's was to cause trauma on her, the Maia's was just a vehicle Dark Force used to try to spark Maia's hate and show her perfect understand that DF was to blame, not the man. In Anna's case, it was important that she suffered that kind of violence attempt, to make her want distance from people. In Maia's case, any violence would do. It was just that she was destitute of other reasons to be attacked.