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Reviews of The Race

Postby Review Type S-2 » Tue Dec 21, '10, 7:21 pm

Hello,

This topic is for reviews of The Race by augmentedfourth. You may use this topic to let augmentedfourth know what you think of this work. When commenting, try to go into detail about what you enjoyed or thought could be improved. Both praise and constructive criticism are encouraged. Please refrain from making non-constructive criticisms.

Please keep your comments in this thread on the subject of The Race. If you would like to discuss another writing, please do so in that writing's review thread.

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Re: Reviews of The Race

Postby Wing Eye » Tue Dec 28, '10, 10:33 pm

Very creative, I really enjoyed it :) Once the hovercraft broke down, I had an idea of what would happen at the end. The link to Phantasy Star 2 was awesome :D
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Re: Reviews of The Race

Postby Qara » Thu Dec 30, '10, 3:32 am

I liked it. It was a fun story. The ending was a bit of a surprise. :)
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Re: Reviews of The Race

Postby H-Man » Fri Mar 4, '11, 12:47 pm

Really good story. I found your approach to the story, the backstory of a minor character (if you can call him that) in the first game and how he came to help Alis later on, and how it happened to link to PSII, quite original. Not having played PSII, it was unexpected, but still quite pleasant.
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