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Reviews of For a Season

Postby Review Type S-2 » Tue Oct 5, '10, 9:10 pm

Hello,

This topic is for reviews of For a Season by H-Man. You may use this topic to let H-Man know what you think of this work. When commenting, try to go into detail about what you enjoyed or thought could be improved. Both praise and constructive criticism are encouraged. Please refrain from making non-constructive criticisms.

Please keep your comments in this thread on the subject of For a Season. If you would like to discuss another writing, please do so in that writing's review thread.

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Re: Reviews of For a Season

Postby Silver_Surfer1 » Sat Oct 9, '10, 5:33 am

H-Man, it was a pleasure to read your latest story on Corg and his friends, etc. I truly hope you will revisit these characters one day as there could be so much potential story material there.

I always look forward to reading about these particular characters and what adventures you have thrust them into next. I was very upset there for a moment when it seemed like Corg might be dead! It was very clever how you handled that.

In some ways I sort of got the feeling that this story seemed to be a little laid back or quieter than your other stories involving these characters. There didn't seem to be as much excitement or heat of battle taking place. There was more talking about it than actually doing it, if you know what I mean. It would have been nice to have these friends spend a little more time with each other also and enjoy each other's company, so to speak.

Also, I did notice some parts of the story could use a little more proofreading in certain areas. And, one thing that bothered me a bit is that at first it took me a while to figure out which one of Corg's wives was speaking in this story since no names were mentioned in the beginning.

I thought the EOTA references, etc., were quite clever and enjoyable. Great idea there. :clap:

All in all, another very enjoyable story! Keep up the good writing work! :)
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Re: Reviews of For a Season

Postby tilinelson2 » Sat Oct 9, '10, 6:09 pm

Haven´t heard the other stories and haven´t any knowledge of what EOTA is, I have to say the story is very well written.
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