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Reviews of So it begins

Postby Review Type S-2 » Tue Dec 21, '10, 7:15 pm

Hello,

This topic is for reviews of So it begins by Zed. You may use this topic to let Zed know what you think of this work. When commenting, try to go into detail about what you enjoyed or thought could be improved. Both praise and constructive criticism are encouraged. Please refrain from making non-constructive criticisms.

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Re: Reviews of So it begins

Postby Silver_Surfer1 » Wed Dec 22, '10, 8:14 pm

Very short and very nice story. Human Emotions can be the pits sometimes and then sometimes absolutely wonderful.

Well done! :)

Hope to read more stories from you in the future! :)
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Re: Reviews of So it begins

Postby tilinelson2 » Sun Dec 26, '10, 5:41 pm

Interesting story. It puts Mieu´s "human traits" as if originated by an advanced AI algorithm. But this algorithm, good as it may be, is not perfect. I quite liked this approach to Mieu.
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Re: Reviews of So it begins

Postby Zed » Thu Dec 30, '10, 10:44 am

Okay... now I feel silly... I've been visiting my story thread not noticing that the story had a review thread of its own. I have been walking around here thinking I got no feedback at all. *embarrassment* Well, thanks for reading! :) I will try to update it soon, it will be kind of short and neat like this I think as I do not want to get too submerged in the political ways of the world. My focus will be on the characters and their relation to one another. :)
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Re: Reviews of So it begins

Postby H-Man » Thu Dec 30, '10, 11:04 am

Not bad. I do think that Mieu would've picked up a bit more than she appeared to have done so by the time Rhys met her. But your Mieu makes for a neat contrast with my more human, romantically-inclined Mieu. Enjoyable dialogue.
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Re: Reviews of So it begins

Postby Silver_Surfer1 » Sun Mar 22, '20, 1:42 am

Short and sweet. A nice story to reread! :clap:
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Re: Reviews of So it begins

Postby myau56 » Sun Mar 22, '20, 12:47 pm

Very, very nice story ! Congratulations !! :clap: :clap:
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