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Reviews of Thousand Years of Solitude

Postby Review Type S-2 » Fri Aug 13, '10, 2:30 pm

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This topic is for reviews of Thousand Years of Solitude by tilinelson2. You may use this topic to let tilinelson2 know what you think of this work. When commenting, try to go into detail about what you enjoyed or thought could be improved. Both praise and constructive criticism are encouraged. Please refrain from making non-constructive criticisms.

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Re: Reviews of Thousand Years of Solitude

Postby Tanith » Mon Aug 16, '10, 2:15 pm

Sorry it took me so long to review this.

Poor, poor Miun. Her story got to me more than any other character in any of the Phantasy Star games. More than Nei, more than Alys. Simply put, I just felt so terrible for her fate. You've captured her personality well; I like how you go back and forth between her android side and her more human emotions. Very well done.
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Re: Reviews of Thousand Years of Solitude

Postby H-Man » Mon Aug 16, '10, 7:24 pm

Wow, that was very well written. Makes me feel even sorrier for her than I did while playing the games. Good stuff!
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Re: Reviews of Thousand Years of Solitude

Postby Xander » Mon Aug 16, '10, 9:09 pm

Great stuff. While I never really gave much care for her, what you've done here is great. You've captured the nature of her plight well and her determination to hold on until Orakio returns to her. Well done. :)
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Re: Reviews of Thousand Years of Solitude

Postby Silver_Surfer1 » Tue Aug 17, '10, 3:59 am

I like what you've done with this story and the perspective it has. Sad ending but it only makes the story better. :clap:
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Re: Reviews of Thousand Years of Solitude

Postby tilinelson2 » Thu Aug 19, '10, 5:10 pm

Thanks, people.

In this story, I used an "stream of consciousness" style, that is not easy to read, but I thought it would fit nicely to the view I wanted to present. Looks like it worked well :-)
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Re: Reviews of Thousand Years of Solitude

Postby Aeroprism » Wed Sep 22, '10, 9:21 pm

Hectic, no proper paging, it looked like computer code.

Wait... ;-)

Nice touch, very believable. Now try to imagine her going through that for over a thousand years.

Scary thought.

Nice work. I enjoyed reading this.
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