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Postby Thoul » Fri Aug 8, '08, 11:01 pm

Another excellent chapter. Alisa really relishes in her new role, doesn't she? That's one heck of a whammy he put on her head. I look forward to seeing how the heroes get out of this latest mess. Great job on the accent at the end there.
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Postby Snorb » Sat Aug 9, '08, 2:56 am

Thanks, Thoul! ^_^

Of course Alisa's enjoying being evil- some of it because of LaShiec's memory tampering, and some of it because of the Hell Crown. Our heroes can't just pull it off her head and make everything better, though- Alisa already spent some time with LaShiec without wearing it, and that's just bad storytelling anyway =p.

Next week's chapter might be a bit late in coming- I'll be going away for a few days next week, thinking up plottery!
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Postby Celeith » Sat Aug 9, '08, 6:17 pm

Nice job man, you've improved alot. Actually your better then me now.. Damn I'm out of shape when it comes to writing, I gotta get back into the habit of it or I'm gonna be passed by everyone.
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Postby Thoul » Mon Aug 25, '08, 11:21 pm

I'm a bit late in getting to this one. Great job as usual. Myau's escape plan was great - I always wondered why they wouldn't get more of those or have him stay that way in the game. Sounds like Katya is definitely in trouble, but if Mad's plan actually works she could be an interesting character. Looking forward to seeing the new mysteries solved! :D
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Postby Snorb » Wed Aug 27, '08, 8:54 pm

...And in turn, open up new mysteries!

New chapter will be up either tonight or tomorrow night!
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Postby Snorb » Tue Sep 2, '08, 1:54 pm

Heya, all, just posting to say Part Seven's been up for a couple of days. Working on Part Eight now!
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Postby scorchx » Wed Sep 3, '08, 12:03 pm

That was a good story Snorb, but then again, i expected no less from the guy who turned out story quality material in a simple roleplay. Kudos.
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Postby Thoul » Sat Sep 13, '08, 1:06 am

I'm way behind in my reading, but I'm starting to get caught up now. I enjoyed the part with Tajim a lot. It was good to see Mad's new creation. I'm a bit surprised at some of her abilities, since they didn't exist in Phantasy Star, but I guess Mad could have discovered them. I look forward to the next chapter!
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Postby Snorb » Sat Sep 13, '08, 4:53 pm

Next chapter is underway as we speak! Or type!

The whole thing about Katya's abilities are that she's supposed to be a hybrid of Mieu (her overall appearance, and her Res, Gi Res, Anti, and Rever programs) and Wren (with Foi, Wat, Zan, and Tsu). Throw in a little bit of Rika (with the Double Slash and Elimination Special Attacks) and you have a prototype combat cyborg!

Also planned for when it ends (arrrr, everything ends sometime) is an alternate ending! (Because I love you guys, and it's the typical DVD thing =p)
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Postby Celeith » Mon Sep 15, '08, 8:41 pm

I've finally read and reread through all of the chapters so far and I'm enjoying every bit of it.
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