Reviews of Novice Way (Ragnarok Online)

Comment and review the writings of other members.

Reviews of Novice Way (Ragnarok Online)

Postby Review Type S-2 » Fri Oct 26, '07, 1:34 am

Hello,

This topic is for reviews of Novice Way (Ragnarok Online), the fan fiction by Kaloes. You may use this topic to let Kaloes know what you think of this story. When commenting on the story, try to go into detail about what you enjoyed or thought could be improved. Both praise and constructive criticism are encouraged. Please refrain from making non-constructive criticisms.

Please keep your comments in this thread on the subject of Novice Way (Ragnarok Online). If you would like to discuss another story, please do so in that story's review thread.

Thanks,
Thoul
User avatar
Review Type S-2
Posting Robot
 
Posts: 184
Joined: March 2007
Location: Bortevo
Achievements: 20

Postby Neithird » Fri Oct 26, '07, 5:42 pm

This is a good story. Nice work with it Kaloes.

One thing I would recommend changing in your future writings is the use of italics for dialogue. It is very odd to see italics used for this and detracted from the experience of reading the story. I'm so used to seeing quote marks that the italics made me stop and think about how to read each line. I feel it would work better like this:
"Since when do you see a novice this day in age?" A man said to his comrade.
:clyde: · · · :pacman: · · · · · · ● · · · · :inky: · · ·
"Freedom is the right of all sentient beings." ~ Optimus Prime
Neithird
Sage
Sage
 
Posts: 1068
Joined: March 2007
Location: United States
Achievements: 21


Return to Reviews

Who is online

Users browsing this forum: No registered users and 0 guests