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PostPosted: Tue Dec 14, '10, 11:01 pm 
Hello,

This topic is for reviews of Flynn's Tale - Permission to board? [Part 3] by Xander. You may use this topic to let Xander know what you think of this work. When commenting, try to go into detail about what you enjoyed or thought could be improved. Both praise and constructive criticism are encouraged. Please refrain from making non-constructive criticisms.

Please keep your comments in this thread on the subject of Flynn's Tale - Permission to board? [Part 3]. If you would like to discuss another writing, please do so in that writing's review thread.

Thanks,
Thoul


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PostPosted: Thu Dec 16, '10, 9:01 pm 
Two days and about 5,000 interruptions later I've finally finished your story, Xander.

Wow, this is excellent stuff! No criticisms at all. I thought you set a really nice pace, which is something I'm quite particular with when I read. I liked how Claire connected to the story, and you've really shown how important their bond is. I'm really looking forward to them reuniting.

Finally, nice integration of EOTA lingo into the well-written action. Several times I had to go back and get a refresher of what's what, so in a way not only was your story a wonderful read but also a good learning tool! :D

Good job, Xander. Hope you'll write more.


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PostPosted: Thu Dec 16, '10, 10:13 pm 
As I said earlier, thank you Tanith. It's much appreciated. :)

I'm glad Aero picked up on the technical stuff. Looking back, it seems only fair that I should go into detail on the stuff he's created if the information is there. And it does help to...bring you more into it in the end. Though I will say the hacking stuff was all my idea. :P Not that there was much to it besides 'plug this into that, etc., etc.'

I was a bit worried I'd slowed the pace down in part 3 for a while, but I just didn't want it to be all gung-ho stuff start to finish. Plus I felt I was pushing the boundaries a bit when I got to the part with the Cast breaking into the room. Why do I feel it's something that belongs in a terminator film?

Anyway, It'll be some time before another action packed Flynn story pops up, but expect more if I can think of something. :D


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PostPosted: Sun Jan 2, '11, 9:38 pm 
Finally got a chance to sit down and read this story. Read all 5 chapters this afternoon and found it very entertaining. :)

Enjoyed the action sequence, and although they didn't interact too very much here, enjoyed Claire & Flynn and the connection they still have. :yes:

Rika wasn't as bad as I was thinking she might be. :wink: In fact, she was quite helpful to Flynn. It was nice to see them working together and defeating their foes, etc. She was a very nice added attraction to the story.

Excellent writing as usual, Xander. :clap:


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