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Reviews of Esmeray Story: Bridging the Divide

Postby Thoul » Sun Aug 15, '10, 12:31 am

Hello,

This topic is for reviews of Esmeray Story: Bridging the Divide by Tanith. You may use this topic to let Tanith know what you think of this work. When commenting, try to go into detail about what you enjoyed or thought could be improved. Both praise and constructive criticism are encouraged. Please refrain from making non-constructive criticisms.

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Re: [CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT] Esmeray Story: Bridging the Divi

Postby Aeroprism » Sun Aug 15, '10, 1:31 am

o_o Ouch? Poor Esmeray!

Very nice, I love the silly.

But I still liked your other Esmeray story more :P You should post it.
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Re: [CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT] Esmeray Story: Bridging the Divi

Postby Thoul » Sun Aug 15, '10, 4:13 am

Wow. :blank: Esmeray really went through the ringer on that one!
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Re: [CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT] Esmeray Story: Bridging the Divi

Postby Silver_Surfer1 » Sun Aug 15, '10, 4:41 am

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Re: [CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT] Esmeray Story: Bridging the Divi

Postby Tanith » Sun Aug 15, '10, 11:35 am

I need to update this, since the second half at least explains why Esmeray was a moron. ;) Sorry for teh silly, Aero. Teenage Esmeray = Headstrong. I'll post my other story, but I have to build up to it first. I think.
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Re: [CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT] Esmeray Story: Bridging the Divi

Postby Lyla2284 » Mon Aug 16, '10, 11:08 am

Beautifully written as always, Tan. Although I couldn't help laughing when poor Essie went through all that hell in trying to use her Techs in a more 'creative' way. ^^ I find her silliness charming though. I'm sure most of us will get to love her over time. :)
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Re: [CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT] Esmeray Story: Bridging the Divi

Postby Tanith » Mon Aug 16, '10, 11:20 am

Thanks, Lyla! And the good news is that this takes place when she's a teen and has, thankfully, gotten a quite a bit more mature since then. It's a silly story, but it was a good way for me to introduce her as a character.
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Re: [CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT] Esmeray Story: Bridging the Divi

Postby Aeroprism » Mon Aug 16, '10, 2:51 pm

Oh wow... now that was nice character development, it gives me quite a few ideas to create game material. Important NPC's, plot devices etc. Yup.

And of course, since it's you, it's as nicely written as always. I was disappointed when it ended, I wished for more.
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Re: [CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT] Esmeray Story: Bridging the Divi

Postby Tanith » Mon Aug 16, '10, 3:13 pm

I have more, don't worry! Though, it'll skip ahead a few years. Right now I'm just trying to get the most important parts of Esmeray out there.
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Re: [CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT] Esmeray Story: Bridging the Divi

Postby Aeroprism » Mon Aug 16, '10, 3:19 pm

And we need a visual reference. Chop chop.

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