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PostPosted: Sun Aug 15, '10, 12:31 am 
Hello,

This topic is for reviews of Esmeray Story: Bridging the Divide by Tanith. You may use this topic to let Tanith know what you think of this work. When commenting, try to go into detail about what you enjoyed or thought could be improved. Both praise and constructive criticism are encouraged. Please refrain from making non-constructive criticisms.

Please keep your comments in this thread on the subject of Esmeray Story: Bridging the Divide. If you would like to discuss another writing, please do so in that writing's review thread.

Thanks,
Thoul


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PostPosted: Sun Aug 15, '10, 1:31 am 
o_o Ouch? Poor Esmeray!

Very nice, I love the silly.

But I still liked your other Esmeray story more :P You should post it.


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PostPosted: Sun Aug 15, '10, 4:13 am 
Wow. :blank: Esmeray really went through the ringer on that one!


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PostPosted: Sun Aug 15, '10, 4:41 am 
:yikes: Any single one of those accidents would be horrifying enough let alone all of them happening at the same time (ie, being on fire, falling, impaling the leg, etc.)!


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PostPosted: Sun Aug 15, '10, 11:35 am 
I need to update this, since the second half at least explains why Esmeray was a moron. ;) Sorry for teh silly, Aero. Teenage Esmeray = Headstrong. I'll post my other story, but I have to build up to it first. I think.


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PostPosted: Mon Aug 16, '10, 11:08 am 
Beautifully written as always, Tan. Although I couldn't help laughing when poor Essie went through all that hell in trying to use her Techs in a more 'creative' way. ^^ I find her silliness charming though. I'm sure most of us will get to love her over time. :)


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PostPosted: Mon Aug 16, '10, 11:20 am 
Thanks, Lyla! And the good news is that this takes place when she's a teen and has, thankfully, gotten a quite a bit more mature since then. It's a silly story, but it was a good way for me to introduce her as a character.


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PostPosted: Mon Aug 16, '10, 2:51 pm 
Oh wow... now that was nice character development, it gives me quite a few ideas to create game material. Important NPC's, plot devices etc. Yup.

And of course, since it's you, it's as nicely written as always. I was disappointed when it ended, I wished for more.


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PostPosted: Mon Aug 16, '10, 3:13 pm 
I have more, don't worry! Though, it'll skip ahead a few years. Right now I'm just trying to get the most important parts of Esmeray out there.


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PostPosted: Mon Aug 16, '10, 3:19 pm 
And we need a visual reference. Chop chop.

:D


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