Reviews of So it begins

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Thoul

Very short and very nice story. Human Emotions can be the pits sometimes and then sometimes absolutely wonderful.

Well done!

Hope to read more stories from you in the future!

Interesting story. It puts Mieu´s "human traits" as if originated by an advanced AI algorithm. But this algorithm, good as it may be, is not perfect. I quite liked this approach to Mieu.

Okay... now I feel silly... I've been visiting my story thread not noticing that the story had a review thread of its own. I have been walking around here thinking I got no feedback at all. *embarrassment* Well, thanks for reading! I will try to update it soon, it will be kind of short and neat like this I think as I do not want to get too submerged in the political ways of the world. My focus will be on the characters and their relation to one another.

Not bad. I do think that Mieu would've picked up a bit more than she appeared to have done so by the time Rhys met her. But your Mieu makes for a neat contrast with my more human, romantically-inclined Mieu. Enjoyable dialogue.

Short and sweet. A nice story to reread!

Very, very nice story ! Congratulations !!