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 Post subject: Reviews of Armorer's Son
PostPosted: Fri Mar 4, '11, 3:40 pm 

This topic is for reviews of Armorer's Son by carlsojos. You may use this topic to let carlsojos know what you think of this work. When commenting, try to go into detail about what you enjoyed or thought could be improved. Both praise and constructive criticism are encouraged. Please refrain from making non-constructive criticisms.

Please keep your comments in this thread on the subject of Armorer's Son. If you would like to discuss another writing, please do so in that writing's review thread.


PostPosted: Sat Mar 26, '11, 3:00 pm 
It was a nice detailed telling of Hahn's story prior to the events of PSIV. Interesting enough, Hahn is a bit underdeveloped on the game, but the details of his past provides one of the best sources for writing background stories for PSIV characters. And you took advantage of that to write a nice story.

PostPosted: Sat Mar 26, '11, 3:06 pm 
It is a very short story. It suits well as a follow-up to Armorer's Son, as it furthers the idealistic ideals of the protagonist. Looks like Hahn wanted to do something, anything, as he was still in doubt of which path of studies he'd take; he just wants to get in. That fits well his character.

I expect more stories about him to come.

PostPosted: Sat Mar 26, '11, 3:07 pm 
Believe it or not, I hated writing this story, because it was too emotional for my tastes.

PostPosted: Sat Mar 26, '11, 3:10 pm 
I was aiming for Flash Fiction range (<1,000 words), and overshot by about 2. There was a more complicated excuse on why Hahn wasn't sure of his major, but I like your reason more, tili.

PostPosted: Mon Apr 4, '11, 3:56 am 
Interesting follow up to the previous story and turn of events. Well now we know that he's gotten in to study, I hope we'll find out more about what happens with him next.

PostPosted: Mon Apr 25, '11, 1:15 pm 
Okay, I stand by my previous statement that you write PSIV a lot better than PSII. I liked the little touch at the end that, despite Hahn's not following his father's footsteps directly, he's really taking on the same work, but from a completely different angle.

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