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Reviews of Wounded Scars

Postby Review Type S-2 » Mon Mar 1, '10, 4:53 pm

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This topic is for reviews of Wounded Scars, the fan fiction by Atlinsmere. You may use this topic to let Atlinsmere know what you think of this story. When commenting on the story, try to go into detail about what you enjoyed or thought could be improved. Both praise and constructive criticism are encouraged. Please refrain from making non-constructive criticisms.

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Re: Reviews of Wounded Scars

Postby Tanith » Wed Mar 3, '10, 4:27 am

I really enjoyed what I've read so far; I can't wait to read more. It'll be interesting to see where your story goes; I like the idea of exploring Chaz's thug past. It might make him more of a likable character for me, since it'll better round out his personality.

My only suggestion is that you might want to break up your dialogue into new paragraphs a bit more. It might make it a little easier to read. Otherwise, keep it up! I'm getting a great sense of your characters' personalities already.
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Re: Reviews of Wounded Scars

Postby Atlinsmere » Wed Mar 3, '10, 8:07 am

Tanith wrote:I really enjoyed what I've read so far; I can't wait to read more. It'll be interesting to see where your story goes; I like the idea of exploring Chaz's thug past. It might make him more of a likable character for me, since it'll better round out his personality.

YAY! I succeeded! =P

My only suggestion is that you might want to break up your dialogue into new paragraphs a bit more. It might make it a little easier to read. Otherwise, keep it up! I'm getting a great sense of your characters' personalities already.


Yeah, I know. I've always had that problem. It's one of those things I've been meaning to work on y'know. I'll keep it mind for chapter 2.

Speaking of which, next chapter will HAHAHA! Did you really think I was gonna reveal it? XD I'm sorry... that was mean... >.>

But yeah, thanks for the review. I appreciate it.
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Re: Reviews of Wounded Scars

Postby Atlinsmere » Sun Apr 4, '10, 1:19 am

Alright, chapter 2 is finally here. Also I made a few changes to the first chapter. Nothing too noticeable though. Just a few things were reworded and I broke it up so it's be easier to read.

Don't worry, next chapter things are going to get more interesting. Hope you can wait a month! =P
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