I read this story today, from start to finish. I would've had a review prepared earlier, but sometimes I man has to do some work.
I really liked the story. It was a very "smooshy" story to be sure, but it hit all of the right spots. Alis is portrayed at first as being a bit melancholy, but not to the point of being "emo" (as the new cliché puts it). The development of her relationship with Nekise came across as being both gradual and organic, with the transition from one demonstration of affection (i.e. a simple visit) to the next level (i.e. holding hands, a kiss, etc.) demonstrating the development nicely.
AugmentedFourth, you really have a way of writing physical affection. It's quite nice. Even something like Nekise looking at her naked, scarred body becomes quite compelling. We at the Fringes joke about you and lemons, but the truth is, when you write about displays of physical love (from the most basic to the more intimate variety), you do it with pananche!
And you have to love a story that ends with a wedding with characters from the game present. I know I do.