Wow, I didn't think that I'd inspire you to write. That's pretty cool.
I'm happy that you enjoyed reading it. As for the other, seems like it's not liked as much as the first one...can't imagine why.

Kidding though, maybe it's not as good as the other. *points at ratings!*
I do recommend reading Thoul's other PSIII fanfic, Moving the Pawns. Very interesting idea regarding Lune and Alair and I liked it a lot.
As for your fanfictions, I did like New Beginnings. (as stated in the other thread) I just noticed your new one, Betrayal. I'm sorry, I don't think that
Maia's father would want her killed. o_O Out of character there, in my opinion, but this
is fanfiction after all. So of course a change here or there doesn't hurt, as long as it's not too extreme. Overall, I think it could use some touching up. Just a bit.
