Bragatyr wrote:I think you have some interesting ideas there, Hukos, especially in dealing with a difficult, even hateful main character. It's always tough to do that, of course, despicable mains and especially narrators are interesting but difficult to relate to. Patrick Bateman of American Psycho and Humbert Humbert of Lolita come to mind. Definitely fascinating characters, but some people find them hard to bear and are put off the books entirely. You'd have to watch for that, and make her real, believable, and compelling in some way. She can't only be self-pitying and unbearable, she has to attract the reader and give him or her a reason to hear her story.
Oh I agree which is the hardest part of writing this kind of thing, hence why I want to do lots of reading so I can brush up on the proper techniques to make this work. Nothing worse than having a great idea and not having the writing chops to make use of it.
I really like the idea that the character is fairly irredeemable, at least in the beginning. I would actually personally be interested to hear whether you've considered having her remain constant in her hatred throughout the story; examining some of the causes of her pain and worldview, perhaps giving the reader a reason to see the world through her eyes in a small way. A character doesn't necessarily have to change throughout the narrative. My personal favorite imperfect narrator is Alex, of A Clockwork Orange, and he of course does evolve in the end. That's cool in its own way, but done a lot; I actually liked American Psycho's Patrick Bateman a lot, too, totally irredeemable but charismatic and compelling in the end, by sheer virtue of his bizarre obsessions and neurotic inner life. For my money it's just as interesting to present a real character without a lesson and say, hey, some people are hateful, unlikeable, and they're never going to change, but they're interesting, too (Joseph Stalin would be a good example).
Well the whole idea behind the character was to see if something such as secular redemption was indeed a possibility. The intended growth pattern is something along the lines of - Villain Protagonist -> Tragic Villain -> Byronic Hero. This way, it puts the emphasis on the self and the individual as the catalyst for redemption and not some otherworldly entity
I could definitely see character development in this one, but I think it might be fascinating to examine the changes in the characters around Rebecca rather than a total sea change in Rebecca. As a gang leader and a hugely strong personality she would obviously command some measure of affection and respect; her servants would obviously be working for her attention, probably as impoverished and hopeless figures themselves. That alone would provide powerful contrast; some people change, and some people simply don't. Since Rebecca is heartless and self-serving it would also be very easy to show a rival figure working against her in some way who resembles her in some ways but who comes to change, someone with maybe some loyalty and understanding with her fellow gang members, something that perhaps the narrator main (if she is the narrator) doesn't have. That alone would be a powerful thematic and character study, to examine a life with some measure of love and human companionship against a life that has shut it out.
That's an interesting idea and certainly one with some merit, but thematically it wasn't quite what I was going for. Though I do have something sort of like that, but its more along the lines of said rival taking what she has away from her, which is sort of a catalyst for her own change.
I do plan on having a foil character, one more empathetic and easy to sympathize with be her right hand man, however. Gives someone a bit more likable to the audience, especially when she's manipulating and abusing him the whole way.
That's the vibe I'm getting so far. From what I've read so far, I would be really interested in reading a character study, rather than a direct philosophical novel. The psychology seems stronger to me here than any larger underlying ideas; I would personally be very interested in reading a novel with this premise if it were truly about the life of the characters. The world-building sounds fascinating, too, so far, I really like the idea of controlling magic in a more real-world way and dealing with difficult psychological issues. My advice would be to keep it as grounded as possible, stark, bare, something reading like Hemingway or Cormac McCarthy and unfolding this brutal destruction and inner crisis with a quiet sadism. In my opinion commenting on the darkness too much in a narrative way would muddy the waters too much; you have a very clear, very dark kernel of a story here, and I think it could very easily tell itself.
That's just the problem, I'm flatout
bad at writing in a minimalistic way. It doesn't help that when I read authors that use a bit more colorful language I get a lot more moved than when I read prose that's meant to be as bare as possible. I mean Huxley is pretty much my favorite author ever and I wouldn't at all call him minimalistic. And nothing else puts me in a good mood like reading some of Nietzsche's prose.
For that reason I think it might be worth considering working against your natural inclinations and thinking about a third-person narrative. It would be easy to show Rebecca's inner life in first-person, but it would also be easy to slip into self-obsession and unnecessary musing (I know this from experience, ha ha). If you do decide on first please make her as unreliable as possible; she's damaged, obviously, she doesn't see the world in a balanced way, and she's clearly a manipulator and possibly a liar. I would definitely think about all the Alex's and Patrick Bateman's and Huckleberry Finn's of the world, and check out as many novels as you can with unreliable narrators, characters who are imperfect and ignorant and young and inscrutable.
That's part of why I'm outlining and then focus on the writing later when I feel like I've picked up on the right literary techniques to pull this off. I
do plan on focusing the part you mentioned though, the fact that she's a damaged person and doesn't see the world is a balanced or logical way. One of the classic features of a pathological narcissist is justifying any damage they do to other people because they negate any damage done to themselves, and see no reason at all not to continue the cycle because that's normal to them and that's precisely what Rebecca does to other people.
I definitely appreciate the feedback!