Reviews of From Fifth to Sixth (The Story of a Sister)

Hello,

This topic is for reviews of From Fifth to Sixth (The Story of a Sister), the fan fiction by Kaloes. You may use this topic to let Kaloes know what you think of this story. When commenting on the story, try to go into detail about what you enjoyed or thought could be improved. Both praise and constructive criticism are encouraged. Please refrain from making non-constructive criticisms.

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Thanks,
Thoul

Thought I'd go back and re-update this one since it was all bunched up together.. I was gonna make all the chapters at once since I already have the story, but when I began writing chapter two my brain turned to mush >< so tell me what you guys think of the new updated version of this.

Very good so far. The rewrite flows nicely in this chapter. I kind of wish the kitten had gone with her, but I guess perhaps it is too little.