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Reviews of Hunter's Guild Adventure

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Thoul
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Joined: Mar 23, '07
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Post subject: Reviews of Hunter's Guild Adventure PostPosted: Tue Mar 4, '08, 6:16 pm 
 
Hello,

This topic is for reviews of Hunter's Guild Adventure, the fan fiction by Trenzer. You may use this topic to let Trenzer know what you think of this story. When commenting on the story, try to go into detail about what you enjoyed or thought could be improved. Both praise and constructive criticism are encouraged. Please refrain from making non-constructive criticisms.

Please keep your comments in this thread on the subject of Hunter's Guild Adventure. If you would like to discuss another story, please do so in that story's review thread.

Thanks,
Thoul


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Trenzer
The Leaf
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Joined: Jul 3, '07
Posts: 249
PostPosted: Tue Mar 4, '08, 6:30 pm 
 
First off I would like to say thanks to isahn80 who helped make half this story. It was indeed part of an RP called Hunter's Guild Reopened which was on the PSIV Message board on GameFaqs. THis was all I could find that was saved and am quite proud. YOu will notice that there are two styles.

LAst but not least. WHat do you all think of this year or two old story?


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Kaloes
I'll Show You What Fear Is!
Esper Apprentice
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Joined: Jul 9, '07
Posts: 726
PostPosted: Tue Mar 4, '08, 6:37 pm 
 
I'm glad you were actually able to save this without all the commotion and stuff goin on back then. The only thing I can say you need to do is actually space out your paragraphs.
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Trenzer
The Leaf
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PostPosted: Tue Mar 4, '08, 6:51 pm 
 
Done and Done. Saving RP's aren't too hard to save if you get it from the beginning. THough I should try to revert back to my old style. TO me it was a bit more mature than it is now. Boredom + RAndomness = my new style. So yeah...


Beauty exists so that someone can tarnish it...
Love exists to be lost...
Innocence exists to be stolen...
Souls exist to be corrupted...
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Thoul
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PostPosted: Wed Mar 5, '08, 6:38 pm 
 
It could use a little proofreading, for grammar, but the story is a fun read. I enjoyed the battle scene at the end and the characters were interesting.
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Trenzer
The Leaf
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PostPosted: Thu Mar 6, '08, 12:56 am 
 
All you see is the original stuff (except for a few words I had to change because they needed censorship). Spelling and grammar, etc. Are all that were not neccessary in the rp.

Glad you liked it Thoul. I enjoyed RPing with isahn. He was a great guy, kinda like Raja and Grandfather Dorin mixed into one with a non-funny normal guy.


Beauty exists so that someone can tarnish it...
Love exists to be lost...
Innocence exists to be stolen...
Souls exist to be corrupted...
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