Reviews of Neifirst, from birth to death

Hello,

This topic is for reviews of Neifirst, from birth to death, the fan fiction by Slap-Happy Rika. You may use this topic to let us know what you think of this story. When commenting on the story, try to go into detail about what you enjoyed or thought could be improved. Both praise and constructive criticism are encouraged. Please refrain from making non-constructive criticisms.

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Thanks,
Thoul

This is an interesting story, but I gave it a low rating because it has Nei(second) appearing apparently fully grown right away. She's suppose to start as a little girl and grow up rapidly, but here she's piloting a sub so that can't be the case.