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Administrator
Joined: Mar 23, '07
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Post subject: Reviews of Dumpster Diving For Fun and Profit
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 Posted: Fri Jan 11, '08, 11:48 pm |
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Hello,
This topic is for reviews of Dumpster Diving For Fun and Profit, the fan fiction by Snorb. You may use this topic to let Snorb know what you think of this story. When commenting on the story, try to go into detail about what you enjoyed or thought could be improved. Both praise and constructive criticism are encouraged. Please refrain from making non-constructive criticisms.
Please keep your comments in this thread on the subject of Dumpster Diving For Fun and Profit. If you would like to discuss another story, please do so in that story's review thread.
Thanks,
Thoul
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Agent
Joined: Jul 10, '07
Posts: 160
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Posted: Fri Jan 11, '08, 11:57 pm |
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I used Shir's Japanese name in the story due to my preference- I just think Shiruka sounds a bit more complete than Shir. Other than that, I hope I got everyone's character right. yay first fic, so please be brutal ^_^)
"There are worlds out there where the sky is burning, and the sea's asleep, and the rivers dream. People made of smoke and cities made of song. Somewhere, there's danger. Somewhere, there's injustice. Somewhere else, the tea's getting too cold. Come on, Ace- we've got work to do!"
~The Seventh Doctor
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UFO! Sage
Joined: May 3, '07
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Posted: Sat Jan 12, '08, 12:04 am |
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Ahh... That was great. xD I loved Hugh's fascination, though it ended up backfiring in the end. You should definitely write more, Snorb.
The dentist who pulls his own teeth has a fool for a patient.
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I'll Show You What Fear Is! Esper Apprentice
Joined: Jul 9, '07
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Posted: Sat Jan 12, '08, 12:25 am |
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definetly write more.. i enjoyed this, and i bet everyone else will to.. its good to see other people writing for a change though 
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Gaze unto me and writhe, fools Sage
Joined: Nov 1, '07
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Posted: Sat Jan 12, '08, 1:33 pm |
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lol, I really liked the "to be continued..." ending. XDDD Also, do you really find the Jetscooter like that? XD
You represent... apathy.You don't really show any emotion. You can be considered cruel and cold, but you just don't really care about anything. This is just the way you are... you're quite a challenge to get close to, and others may perceive you as boring.
Zeus was the Greek excuse for having no logical explination for lightning. Hades was for the death that baffled them. Posiedon tore apart at their shores. So Athena must have explained the people who didn't believe in the gods. |
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I'll Show You What Fear Is! Esper Apprentice
Joined: Jul 9, '07
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Posted: Sat Jan 12, '08, 1:59 pm |
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if you did then my life woulda been easier yesterday when i was trying to get it for the past 3 days ><
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Mystic - Silver Tusk Palman
Joined: Mar 27, '07
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Posted: Sat Jan 12, '08, 10:00 pm |
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Interesting story, and not what you would typically expect, lol. Can't wait to read the sequel. 
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Administrator
Joined: Mar 23, '07
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Posted: Mon Jan 14, '08, 1:30 am |
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Nice... very vivid imagery and excellent characterization. Especially on Shir and her smelling Laconia excuse for not going with the others.
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Agent
Joined: Jun 15, '07
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Posted: Mon Jan 14, '08, 2:43 am |
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I always thought Shir should have been able to join before you get the Jet Scooter. It's stupid that Piata has all those bridges around it and none of them connect to the rest of Motavia. Of course any well-written story that focuses around Rolf, Nei, and Shir certainly has my approval.
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Innkeeper
Joined: Jan 11, '08
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Posted: Tue Jan 29, '08, 2:17 pm |
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Perhaps I'm just a curmudgeon, but I stopped reading after "T_T"
It's about Shir? Maybe I'll give it another chance.
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